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Touch me
Burning
All this blood
On my hands

Feel my yearning
I swear
I’ll cry out your name

Touch me
I’m broken
Writhing on the inside

Feel me cringing*
Wishing for
Your hands

Betrayal
Lying
I can’t trust
My insides

You stare
At me burning
You see right threw me



*This may read crying I was quite drunk when this was written and it’s not really legible

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I left this in its orignal state. I liike the corse feeling with it. Alot of the wrong word and what not. As noted this was another one of those drunk ones. I must of been really drunk becouse it's printed and I normaly write in script.

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:iconhexvenus:
I love your work!!!!
i can relate to your writings like i wrote them myself!
makes me all shuddery and stuff...

xxx
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:icontwistitrosey:
Thank you so much I take that a huge compliment. Writing poems is one thing writing poems other people can relate to is much harder thank you :)
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:iconsnazy-a-tastic:
~snazy-a-tastic May 14, 2004   Photographer
I really enjoyed reading that.
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:icontwistitrosey:
Thank you :)
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:iconwritinfanatic:
I like the powerful 1 worded lines:
"Betrayal
Lying"
You wrote how you were feeling than expanded on them, it's a gr8 poem 4 wen u were drunk!! wel dun :clap:
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:icontwistitrosey:
Thank you :)
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:iconfrankienexus:
mm i actually dig this, its pretty direct and unforced and pretty poignant(sp). so many times the words, the sentences are there fully formed in your mind and no matter what state u are in they come out in a honest way.. very cool
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:icontwistitrosey:
Thank you so very much :)
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:iconreiahart:
i like it !!!! funny that you wrote it while drunk too =P
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:icontwistitrosey:
oh and thank you :)
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