I left this in its orignal state. I liike the corse feeling with it. Alot of the wrong word and what not. As noted this was another one of those drunk ones. I must of been really drunk becouse it's printed and I normaly write in script.
I like the powerful 1 worded lines:
"Betrayal
Lying"
You wrote how you were feeling than expanded on them, it's a gr8 poem 4 wen u were drunk!! wel dun
mm i actually dig this, its pretty direct and unforced and pretty poignant(sp). so many times the words, the sentences are there fully formed in your mind and no matter what state u are in they come out in a honest way.. very cool
i can relate to your writings like i wrote them myself!
makes me all shuddery and stuff...
xxx
"Betrayal
Lying"
You wrote how you were feeling than expanded on them, it's a gr8 poem 4 wen u were drunk!! wel dun